Careful analysis and paging of a picture book manuscript is
an important step toward presenting the text visually to its best
advantage. This process also helps the
illustrator to pinpoint, and compensate for, any structural weaknesses in the
text. It can even enable the
illustrator to turn a minimal text into a full-length picture book. I'll choose "Humpty Dumpty"
as an example of this last.
Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall
Humpty Dumpty had a great fall
All the King's horses
And all the King's men
Couldn't put Humpty together again
As usual, I look in this text for 5 critical points (see my
blog http://thewendywatsonblog.blogspot.com/2012/04/picture-book-design-analyzing.html): setting the scene; the story begins; the final crisis; the final
resolution; and the wind-down.
My take on "Humpty Dumpty" is that several segments of the necessary structure
are missing. There
is no "setting the scene"---with the very first words of text, the
story is already in full swing. Humpty
Dumpty has already taken action: he sat on a wall. If this were the beginning of an actual picture book, I would
wonder: Why did he do that? I can identify the final
crisis---despite many attempts by all the king's men, Humpty is still in
pieces. But there is no final resolution,
and no wind-down. Again, if the
text were parcelled out, as is, into a picture book, and I came to the last
page and read "couldn't put Humpty together again. The End" I would wonder: Is that
it? That's the end? So my assessment is that the text, as it
stands, is only an anecdote, not a story with a beginning, middle, and
end.
Can I, the illustrator, extend this truncated text enough to
support a full-length picture book? I would need, first of all, to flesh out the rest of the
story in my mind. What IS the
setting? What is Humpty Dumpty's
life normally like? And what then
leads him---or forces him---to climb up onto a wall? This part of the story I would then portray through pictures
alone, on the very first pages of the book---the half title, title, and
dedication, probably. On the first
spread of the actual body of the book I would place the first words of the text
with its accompanying illustration:
"Humpty Dumpty sat..."
Word balloons with my own additional dialogue could add to the
story-telling.
And at the end, what is the final resolution? What happens after the the King's men fail
to repair the broken Humpty? Is
Humpty then turned into an omelette?
Or is he repaired after all in some miraculous fashion? I would need, also, to create a
wind-down. The towns-folk,
comfortably full, settling in for a nice nap after devouring the
Humpty-omelette? Or the re-born
Humpty, happily restored to a life in which he'll act perhaps more wisely---or
perhaps even more foolishly?
As at the beginning of the book, I'd tell the story of these
segments through wordless illustrations that would occupy the two or three
final spreads of the book. Thus the
final words of the verse "...couldn't put Humpty together again" I'd
place perhaps on spread 10, leaving spreads 11 and 12 for the wordless illustrations that would finish up the story.
Humpty Dumpty is an extreme example of a text whose
structure needs assistance. But the process I've outlined demonstrates one of
the most helpful techniques that an illustrator can bring to any picture book
manuscript.
(The illustration is by the great Frederick Richardson, illustrator of the Classic Volland Edition of Mother Goose, with which I grew up.)
Thanks for another great blog about manuscripts!
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DeleteI love the way you open up new possibilities in seeing and understanding a rhyme we all know so well. What a wonderful post. Thank you.
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DeleteI must say, I've found this series extremely interesting. It might be useful to people studying "the history of the book", which is becoming a big subject in universities.
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